Hi javana my name is lucas I go to yaldhurst model school I like how you are telling us that are looking at this blog post. It is good and helpful when you are frustrated you can look at this blog post I like how you told us about what you do when you are in the yellow zone next time you should tell more about it bye.
I liked the way you added pictures to show what being in the yellow zone looks like. You are good at making the word art and I think it looks pretty good.
The facts you have used are pretty good. I like the one when you said frustrated because I usually get frustrated at home when my little sisters are nagging me. It also makes me feel quite annoyed when they do that. 😊
To improve, you could add more writing, I have had to say lots of this to people so don't feel ashamed, everyone misses this one out. I know it can be hard but to add more writing you could put an ending as well as an introduction, it might help you quite a lot.
What font did you use for frustrated and silly? Why is the yellow zone yellow?
Bye! Hope you enjoyed reading this comment and can use it to improve, please reply as I worked hard to make it.
Hello my name is Ashlee and I am a year six at Yaldhurst Model School I really like your yellow zones blog post can't wait to see more. What's your favorite animal?
Kia ora, I'm Zahrah from Yaldhurst Model School. I enjoyed the part when you put lots of photos. The facts you used are really good. I like the words you put in it is awesome. Next time, you could put a bit more words.
Hi javana my name is lucas I go to yaldhurst model school I like how you are telling us that are looking at this blog post. It is good and helpful when you are frustrated you can look at this blog post I like how you told us about what you do when you are in the yellow zone next time you should tell more about it bye.
ReplyDeleteKIA Ora,Javana My name Is Ethan and I am from Yaldhurst Model School.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you showed there meaning and put the pictures in.
You taught me what the yellow zone is.
How come you choose to write about this?
Did you think about when you felt like that?
- Ethan nice job
Kia ora, I'm Amelia from Yaldhurst Model School.
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you added pictures to show what being in the yellow zone looks like. You are good at making the word art and I think it looks pretty good.
The facts you have used are pretty good. I like the one when you said frustrated because I usually get frustrated at home when my little sisters are nagging me. It also makes me feel quite annoyed when they do that. 😊
To improve, you could add more writing, I have had to say lots of this to people so don't feel ashamed, everyone misses this one out. I know it can be hard but to add more writing you could put an ending as well as an introduction, it might help you quite a lot.
What font did you use for frustrated and silly?
Why is the yellow zone yellow?
Bye! Hope you enjoyed reading this comment and can use it to improve, please reply as I worked hard to make it.
-Amelia 😉
Hello my name is Ashlee and I am a year six at Yaldhurst Model School I really like your yellow zones blog post can't wait to see more. What's your favorite animal?
ReplyDeleteKia ora, I'm Zahrah from Yaldhurst Model School. I enjoyed the part when you put lots of photos. The facts you used are really good. I like the words you put in it is awesome. Next time, you could put a bit more words.
ReplyDeleteRegards from Zahrah
Kia ora Zahrah i like the photos too thank you for your feedback next i will a bit more words
DeleteBye
-Javana